The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Thailand who visited four different places in Bangkok. Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to Thailand who visited four different places in Bangkok. Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the percentage of tourists visiting Thailand who visited four distinct locations -
Bangkok
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namely
Bangkok
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Zoo, Sea World,
Wax
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Museum
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and China Town - in the years 2014 to 2017. It is evident that visitors were interested in visiting the abovementioned locations till 2016,
however
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, in 2017, the count declined drastically except for one location. The popularity of China Town and
Wax
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Museum
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was
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has
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remarkably
increasing
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increased
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,
initially
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their popularity was at 20% and 45% in 2014,
then
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the numbers increased to 100% and 80% respectively in the year 2016. Later, in 2017, similar to other spots, these places
also
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experienced a decline but China Town experienced a dramatic one,
however
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,
Wax
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Museum
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still had 70% of visitors.
On the other hand
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,
Sea World
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SeaWorld
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was the most visited place in 2014 with 70%,
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however
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however,
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a steady decline
reported
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was reported
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in
coming
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the coming
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years leaving only 20% of visitors in 2017.
Moreover
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,
Bangkok
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Zoo had a similar trend. To summarize, all the places were hotspots until 2016 but later most people visiting Thailand only visited
Bangkok
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's
Wax
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Museum
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bangkok, wax, museum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • tourists
  • attraction
  • trend
  • significant
  • decline
  • peak
  • cultural significance
  • popularity
  • preferences
  • comparison
  • evaluate
  • data
  • analyze
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