IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

With the latest technological advancements, dating is now possible online. Would you recommend online dating for your single friends? What are the advantages and disadvantages of online dating? Site some examples to support your answer.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Now, the developed technologist
allow
Change the verb form
allows
show examples
for
Change preposition
apply
show examples
people
Use synonyms
 to
dating
Replace the word
date
show examples
 online .There are
advantages
Use synonyms
 and disadvantages
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
 that. But for me I would not advise my friends
in dating
Change preposition
to date
show examples
 behind screens (online) because there are a lot of bad persons
Also
Linking Words
, these dating websites may attack
Correct article usage
the privacy's
show examples
privacy's
Change preposition
privacy of
show examples
users
Use synonyms
. As I mentioned above there are
advantages
Use synonyms
for
Change preposition
to
show examples
 that , one of them help
a
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
specific
people
Use synonyms
 who cannot
found
Wrong verb form
find
show examples
 their lovers in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
real life . In
addation
Correct your spelling
addition
, it is
special
Add an article
a special
show examples
 experience for those who like
advanture
Correct your spelling
advantage
 and try for something new. On one hand , meeting others online for
people
Use synonyms
 who cannot
found
Wrong verb form
find
show examples
 their love
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
show examples
 beneficial
due to
Linking Words
 there are mixed
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
users
Use synonyms
 online .They are from different cultures , religions and ages. Some individuals have a certain description for his/her purpose like
have
Wrong verb form
having
show examples
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
show examples
certain characteristics in appearance or looking for a similar personality .
Second
Change the article
The second
show examples
 advantage is
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
 new experience
meeting
Change preposition
of meeting
show examples
 a strange person
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
show examples
 a
risk
Use synonyms
 and
people
Use synonyms
 who like adventures will enjoy
this
Linking Words
 attempt. Chatting and
discover
Wrong verb form
discovering
show examples
 unknown
users
Use synonyms
 is very interesting to
those kind
Change the determiner
that kind
those kinds
show examples
 of
people
Use synonyms
 .
On the other hand
Linking Words
 , chatting with strange
users
Use synonyms
 online
by
Change preposition
on
show examples
 Facebook or X have a high level of
risk
Use synonyms
 because
this
Linking Words
user
Use synonyms
 may
be exploits
Change the verb form
be exploiting
show examples
 the other
users
Use synonyms
 to get money or other objects .
Actually
Add a comma
Actually,
show examples
 the danger is not just
exploit
Correct article usage
an exploit
show examples
 but the
user
Use synonyms
 could blackmailed by
crimnals
Correct your spelling
criminals
.
Moreover
Linking Words
 ,these dating websites may use
information
Add an article
the information
show examples
 of the
user
Use synonyms
 and attack their privacy. Data about
Use synonyms
user
Fix the agreement mistake
users
show examples
such
Linking Words
 as
the
Change the word
their
show examples
 names , jobs ,ages and social status.
That is
Linking Words
 illegal and may the
users
Use synonyms
 face negative consequences.
Finally
Linking Words
 , dating online
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
show examples
advantages
Use synonyms
 and disadvantages . New experience and
meet
Wrong verb form
meeting
show examples
 a unique person are the main
advantages
Use synonyms
 .
Linking Words
While the
Correct word choice
The
show examples
 high rate of
risk
Use synonyms
 and
face
Wrong verb form
facing
show examples
a strange persons
Correct the article-noun agreement
a strange person
strange persons
show examples
 are the main disadvantages . In my
opinion
Add a comma
opinion,
show examples
 I don't recommend these sites for dating online because it's
high
Add a hyphen
high-risk
show examples
risk
Use synonyms
 and not trusted websites.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use clear topic sentences to introduce each paragraph. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Be cautious about grammar and sentence structure, as clarity is affected by errors. Proofreading can help you catch mistakes that disrupt understanding.
task achievement
While you provided some examples, try to include more specific examples or anecdotes to support your arguments. This will strengthen your response.
task achievement
You raised relevant points regarding the pros and cons of online dating, which shows that you understand the topic well.
task achievement
The essay presents an opinion clearly, allowing readers to understand your stance on the issue.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Wider pool
  • Potential partners
  • Pre-screening
  • Compatible interests
  • Convenience
  • Accessibility
  • Empowerment
  • Deceitful profiles
  • Misrepresent
  • Lack of depth
  • Physical appearance
  • Analysis paralysis
  • Cyber-security
  • Compromised information
  • Dating app
  • Common interests
  • Meaningful connection
  • Identity theft
  • Overwhelming choices
  • Social circles
What to do next:
Look at other essays: