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The table and pie charts depict the figures of national and international, female and male students conducting researches in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010

The table and pie charts depict the figures of national and international, female and male students conducting researches in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010
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The table and pie charts depict the figures of national and international, female and male
students
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 conducting
researches
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research
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 in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.
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, there was a strong growth in the
number
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 of
students
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 carrying
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out researches
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researches
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research
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 over 9 years. A higher figure of local
students
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 researching compared with that of international
students
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. It can be seen from the table that in 2001, the
number
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 of local learners was about six times that of international ones, at 33,657 and 5,192 respectively. From a total of 38,849
students
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 conducting
researches
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 in 2001, the figure rose to 54,081 in 2010
in
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with
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which
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local
students
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accounted
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 for a notable
number
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 of 39,488. The 2001 chart shows that 87%
was
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were
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 local research
students
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while
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 only 13%
was
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were
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 international ones.
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, in 2010, the
number
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 of local learners decreased to 73% and the percentage of international ones increased to 27%. In 2001, the figures
of
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for
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 male and female local
students
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researches
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research
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 were equal but
in
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9 years later, the percentage of girls surpassed boys at 39% and 35%, respectively. In 2001, only 9% of males and 4% of females from foreign countries researched
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 the
number
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 increased to 12% of boys and 15% of girls in 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "depict" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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