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You want to volunteer to help the old people of your community. An organization in your area works for the benefit of old people. Write a letter to the in-charge of that organization explaining - Why do you want to help - How can you help them - When will you be available

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to you to express my interest in volunteer work for the community. I
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 eagerly waiting for
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 opportunity
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long
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 time where
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 can serve the old community and
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 my skills and experience.
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,
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 participated in some
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campaigns
 to aware the general public about
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rising
 environmental issues. I can aid your team in organising the camp, companionship or creating
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recreational activities.
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 have good listening skills that
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 me to
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connect
 with them more closely and they can share their problem with me freely. Currently,
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 am on my summer break so
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 will be free throughout the month of
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 and
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. You can contact me during the weekdays anytime. I would feel
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 for the chance
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 be a part of your team. Thanks for
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 consideration.
Your
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 sincerely,
komal
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coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the organization of your ideas, ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a single main point to enhance clarity.
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Make sure to proofread your letter for grammatical errors and typos, as they can impact the overall impression.
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Using a more formal tone consistently will enhance the suitability of your writing tone for a formal letter.
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You have expressed a genuine interest in helping the elderly, which is a commendable motivation.
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Your availability is clearly stated, making it easy for the organization to understand when they can reach you.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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