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In some places, young people find it difficult to communicate with older people. Why is this? What are the solutions? (เขียนอย่างน้อย 10 บรรทัด)

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Generation-gap
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The generation gap
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 problem is an inescapable situation when young and old
people
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 meet. In many cases, younger
people
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 may find it hard to break the ice and start a conversation with older
people
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. In the following paragraphs, I would like to discuss the practical solutions to fix the communication problems between these communication gaps.
Firstly
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, The youngers need to show respect and
understand
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understanding
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 towards the older
people
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. Elders gain experiences
along
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over
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 their lifetime.
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, some of them may have strong
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 that cannot easily change or easily
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with
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to
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 the new trends.
By understanding
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Understanding
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 and admiring their strong attitude can help
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the
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 atmosphere where the elders adore
youngers
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younger
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 and become more open with the conversation.
Secondly
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, older
people
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also
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 need to show understanding and open-minded attitude towards the youngers. Younger
people
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 desire to receive social acceptation from other
people
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 not only the same age but from
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apply
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different ages as well. If the elder
start
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starts
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 the conversation with narrow-minded, the younger may feel rejected.
This
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 may
results
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 in
negative
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 direction and
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create
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bigger
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 gap between two
people
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 In conclusion, understanding
from
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both ways is the key to the solution
of
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to
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this
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 problem. Age gaps mean more differences between two
people
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 but regardless of how old the person is, having empathy towards the person who you communicate with will break
these difficulty
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.

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The essay presents a clear understanding of the communication gaps between young and older generations.
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The structure of introduction and conclusion is clearly defined, aiding comprehension.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological proficiency
  • communication gap
  • digital tools
  • worldviews
  • common ground
  • contemporary slang
  • informal language
  • misunderstandings
  • social hierarchy
  • cultural norms
  • stereotypes
  • prejudices
  • open communication
  • out of touch
  • inexperienced
  • effective communication
  • intergenerational programs
  • cross-generational activities
  • mutual respect
  • active listening
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