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In some places, young people find it difficult to communicate with older people. Why is this? What are the solutions? (เขียนอย่างน้อย 10 บรรทัด)

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structure
Plan your essay with an intro that says what you write about and your view. Then write 2 or 3 clear body parts, each one main idea, and finish with a short conclusion.
language
Use simple and correct grammar. Check spelling of some words.
content
Give clear examples for each point. Explain how it makes it hard for people of different ages to talk.
coherence
Link ideas with better transitions. Use words like also, but, so, therefore to connect sentences.
task
You state the topic and give some ideas.
structure
You use order words like First, Second, Third.
content
You note changes in tech that can affect talk between people.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological proficiency
  • communication gap
  • digital tools
  • worldviews
  • common ground
  • contemporary slang
  • informal language
  • misunderstandings
  • social hierarchy
  • cultural norms
  • stereotypes
  • prejudices
  • open communication
  • out of touch
  • inexperienced
  • effective communication
  • intergenerational programs
  • cross-generational activities
  • mutual respect
  • active listening
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