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The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone service between 2001 and 2010

The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone service between 2001 and 2010
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This
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 line chart represents the average spending for two different categories in the period of 2001 an tell 2010.
Overall
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 the expenditure for both
cell
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 phones and residential
phone
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 services
,
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apply
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 was totally opposite in the
howl
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whole
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period.
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withe
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with
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 in 2001 the cost of
phone
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 services riched 700$
compeer
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compared
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withe
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with
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cell
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phone
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phones
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 the difference was approximately 400$. After that
bteween
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between
 2002 and 2005
cell
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phone
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phones
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 had
a
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great growth,
aroud
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around
 the double in three years.
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hand
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hand,
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 residential
phone
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 had a drop in tell the fuger been similar in 2005 around 440.
In
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 the end of 2006 the number
got hung
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of
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 different
cell
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phone
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phones
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 preceded the other category, despite
of
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apply
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the diffreince
in
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at
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 the
bigeing
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beginning
 of 2001 was
sigificant
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significant
. After 4 years from 2006
cell
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phone
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phones
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riched
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reached
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 the
bigest
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 number of spend
wiche
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which
is
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was
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 about 770% and,
residential
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the residential
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contenuy
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contract
drop
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dropped
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 and in 2010 they got 400$.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cell, phone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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