Some people regard eating meat as completely wrong. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays ,Many argue that eating
vegtabules
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vegetables
and
frut
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fruit
fruits
is best than eating
a meat
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meat
a slice of meat
a lump of meat
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or
peaf
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leaf
or
lahm
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Lahm
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,
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apply
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because it is harmful
for
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to
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animils
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animals
to
killed
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be killed
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by
people
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just to eat the
meet
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meat
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of these
animals
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,I disagree at
all
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apply
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and I will
duscces
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discuss
why later .
Overall
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, The number of
people
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started
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who started
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to avoid eating
meet
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meat
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has increased in
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last
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the last
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three
dacedes
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decades
,I think the primary reason is
rothless
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ruthless
worthless
,these
people
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think that killing
a huge numbers
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huge numbers
a huge number
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of
animals
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per day
in
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apply
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worldwide will
tirmanite
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terminate
different types of
animals
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shortly ,
In addition
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,they
belivie
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believe
that
vigtabules
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vegetables
are the best diet you could ever have ,
For example
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,they are saying that if you eat a
vegtabules
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vegetable
vegetables
your mental and physical health will be improved directly ,
Finally
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, they think that the way
people
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killing
animals
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is not good enough ,
For example
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,Killing the
shaeps
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shapes
sharps
as
group
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a group
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in the
maechens
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machines
.
However
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,I think that there
is
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are
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many ways to
respone
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respond
response
to
this
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opinion,
Firstly
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,All
people
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in the world have their own desire
to
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for
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what should eat and what should not eat ,so, no one
could
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can
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control
others
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others'
other's
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opinios
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opinions
and even try to attack them just because they have diffrenet food lifestyle .
Socendly
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Secondly
,every different
kindes
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kinds
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of meat has a lot of benefits
such
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as protein which
is help
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helps
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people
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to build
musacles
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muscles
muscle
and stay healthy . In conclusion ,I think
meeat
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meat
is
nesseeary
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necessary
in the program diet ,and
people
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are
thinking
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think
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that meat is
a
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apply
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completely wrong should consider again the benefits of meet
such
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as protein ,we could not have protine except when we
extact
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expect
it from
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animals
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animal
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resources ,eventually ,
wether
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whether
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you are a
vegeteriane
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vegetarian
or normal person as we are ,you do not have the right to
categraires
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categories
people
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based on what they eat ,everyone could eat what they like to eat .

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