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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The given graph illustrates the numbers of
people
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taken
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taking
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 place at various activities of one social centre in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall
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, the film
club
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 had the highest
number
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 of
participants
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 over the
20 year
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 period.
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 table tennis saw
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considreably
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considerably
considerable
marginal
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apply
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number
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 of
attendee
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attendees
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 in 2000, it nearly reached
to
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apply
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similar
people
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 with film
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club
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clubs
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 in 2020.
To begin
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 with, the film
club
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activity
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 showed the highest
number
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 of members from 2000 to 2020 in Melbourne. In 2000, about 65
people
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took
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 place
in
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flim
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film
club
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 and
then
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 virtually reached
to
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70
people
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 it stabilised up until the year 2020.
At
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 the same period, martial arts
participants
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leveled
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levelled
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 off between 30 and 40
people
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as well as
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 the second social
activity
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was mostly
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mostly chosen
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 in 2000. When it comes to table tennis, it had the lowest
number
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 of
entrant
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entrants
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 with about 16
people
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 in 2000, even though it was the second largest
number
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 with
approxiamately
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approximately
 55
participants
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 in 2020,
this
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activity
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 rocketed especially from 2010 to 2020.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of
attendee
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attendees
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 of the
ameteaur
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amateur
 dramatics had about 26
people
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 in 2000. It is noticeable that it slightly increased to 30
people
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 in the first five years but
this
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 figure gradually declined to nearly 5
people
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 until 2020. Another interesting situation was members of musical performances,
due to
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 the beginning year. Entrants
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firstly
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 took part in
this
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activity
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 in 2005 and it moderately ascended and reached
to
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hardly 20
participants
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 in 2020.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, club, number, participants, activity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participants
  • social centre
  • comparison
  • trends
  • consistently popular
  • gained popularity
  • lost popularity
  • community interest
  • availability of facilities
  • social factors
  • economic factors
  • external events
  • economic downturns
  • health crises
  • demographic changes
  • aging population
  • marketing
  • community outreach programs
  • participation rates
  • Melbourne
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