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The graphs below show the size of the ozone hole over Antarctica and the production of three ozone-damaging gases from 1980 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the size of the ozone hole over Antarctica and the production of three ozone-damaging gases from 1980 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The current graphs illustrate how the
size
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 of the
Ozon
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hole
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 had changed over Antarctica from 1980 to 2000
in addition
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 to the
production
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 of gases damaging the
Ozon
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 layer in
this
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 period. At first glance, it is comprehended that the
Ozon
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hole
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size
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 over Antarctica has significantly enlarged from 1980 to 2000. What is more, CFC-11
production
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 had dramatically declined
in contrast
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 to the other
Ozon
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-damaging gases over these years. Regarding the
Ozon
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hole
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size
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 over Antarctica, the
size
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 of the
hole
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 was approximately less than 500 square km in 1980. It followed an increasing trend till 1990 and
then
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 dropped to almost 1000 square km by 1993. There was a considerable surge in the
Ozon
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hole
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size
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 from
then
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 to 2000. Based on the second graph, the
production
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 of CFC-11 was
near to
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nearly
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 70
tonnes
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 in 1980 and remained unchanged until 1983 and fell sharply to a low of almost 5
tonnes
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 by 2000. The CFC-12
production
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 was about 30
tonned
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tonnes
 which
skightly
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slightly
 had increased to an amount of more than 40
tonnes
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 til 2000. The
production
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 of N2O emerged in 1990 and significantly increased to
near
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nearly
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 30
tonnes
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 by 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words size, ozon, hole, production, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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