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# You stayed in a hotel and was not satisfied with service. Write a letter to manager. - why you chose this hotel - what problems did you face - tell the manager what to do

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Dear Hotel Manager, I recently stayed at your hotel with my family. We chose your hotel because of
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 reviews and its nice location. Unfortunately, the service did not meet our expectations.
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our room was not clean when we arrived. There was dust on the furniture and the bed sheets did not look fresh. We had to wait for the cleaning staff, which was uncomfortable after a long trip.
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the air conditioner in the room was not working. We told the staff several times, but no one came to fix it. Since the weather was hot, it was hard to sleep at night.
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, the breakfast was not as expected. There were very few options, and the food was cold. Some of the staff were not polite or helpful, which made us feel unwelcome. Thank you for your time. I look forward to your reply. Sayfiddinov Umrzoq

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure a clearer structure by organizing your points in a more logical sequence. Consider grouping similar issues together for better coherence.
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Add more detail to your complaints to make them more impactful, and be specific about how you would like the issues to be resolved.
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Your letter has a polite tone and expresses your dissatisfaction clearly, which is commendable.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate for a formal letter, which adds to its professionalism.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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