In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

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Recently a lot of countries made it easier for their buyers to find foods from all over the globe in their local
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a lot
of advantages but expectedly some drawbacks are
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acquired. I personally believe that
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the prior outweighs the
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, as we shall
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discuss. 
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Firstly
, having products from all over the world in a local market suggests the diversity available. For say, foreigners visiting a new
country
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would find it very
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convenient
to find their
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's
food
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accessible anywhere.
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,
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is an economic advantage as it can boost the
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's popularity and tourism. A trending example is
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Korean Buldak Noodles. It gained so much attention;
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, it is in almost all supermarkets now, boosting Korea not only financially but
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many people know
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about Korea
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On the other hand
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, the concept of shipping all these products can come as a hygiene issue. As the
food
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can travel for hours, days and even weeks. In
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alot
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a lot
of procedures need to take place in order for the
food
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to stay edible and not decompose. All these steps can
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cause a cost problem where special containers might have to be used and special refrigerators for shipping,
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. In conclusion, having global
food
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at your local supermarket might have its cons, either
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costing
much
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to be shipped or arriving in
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bad shape. It is without a doubt a great addition to both the buyer and the provider allowing
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diversity
in one
country
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and an economic boost to the other.

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language
Make sure to proofread your essay for small typos like 'alot' (should be 'a lot') and 'conveient' (should be 'convenient'). Such inaccuracies do not typically lower your grade, but a clean presentation is always beneficial.
content
Try to strengthen your argument about the positive aspects of having global foods in local supermarkets. You could include more examples or details about the benefits to local economies or cultural exchanges.
coherence
Consider using more cohesive devices to connect your ideas more smoothly. Phrases like 'Moreover,' 'Additionally,' or 'Furthermore' can help guide the reader through your points clearly.
content
The essay presents a clear opinion that the positives outweigh the negatives, which is a crucial part of the task.
coherence
You have structured your essay well with clear paragraphs for each main point, including an introduction and conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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