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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Angsa

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Angsa
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The map illustrates the plan
of constructing
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 a new shopping mall
and
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for which two different locations have been recommended in the
city
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 of Brandfield.
Overall
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, Brandfield is a large
town
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 with
variety
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 of facilities including a river, golf playground, residential area, a
city
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centre
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, industries
and
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railway tracks and roads connecting the
city
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.
According to
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 the picture,
site
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 1 is in the north direction of the
town
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 close to the river
while
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2nd
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site
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 is far away near
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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 zone. Looking at the details, there is a railway line in the middle of the
town
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 from the north to the south side.
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, the first
site
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 of the
shoppping
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shopping
centre
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 is proposed near the
city
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centre
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 which is right in the middle of the
town
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.
Additionaly
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, the S1 area is
nearby
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 the houses in
north
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also
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 there is a huge park and golf club within
a
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reach
to
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 the
site
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 which makes it the ideal location for families to spend weekends.
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, S1 is just beside the river which gives it a beautiful view.
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, S2 is located away from the
city
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centre
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 in the south
in
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between the roads and the railway line so it is
convinient
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convenient
 for people from
neighboring
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cites
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cities
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 as it is surrounded by two transport modes. Another interesting feature is that there is
a
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 industrial area close to
second
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site
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 which aids workers to visit the mall and spend some time during their break time.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, town, centre, site with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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