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Band 4

You study at a college in the city centre. You use public transport to get to the college but the bus service you use has changed. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company. In the letter, -Say who you are and the details of service you use -Explain the problem with the bus service -Suggest what you think the manager should do

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Dear Sir or Madame Hello, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter to complain about the
bus
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schedule
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in
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from
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Melbourne
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 Central to
Melbourne
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 University on 17th January 2025. My name is Alexa I am a
Melbourne
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 University student. I always catch a
bus
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 to university
everyday
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 at 8 o'clock in the morning at
Melbourne
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 Central
bus
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 stop but today I got a delayed time from the
schedule
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 from 8am. to 8.30am. without
notification
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notification,
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it's resulting
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it resulted
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to
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in
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I
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me
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missed
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missing
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 my morning classroom. I would like to recommend you
to
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apply
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inform the changing
schedule
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 in advance not only at
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bus
Add an article
the bus
a bus
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 stop but
also
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 in mobile applications is must
be help
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help
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 us
for
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with
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 planning.
Otherwise
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, you should
have
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not have
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 any replacement transport until you start your new
schedule
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. I appreciate your help. Best regard, Alexa

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly structure your letter with distinct paragraphs for the introduction, problem explanation, and suggestions.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that you properly greet the recipient (consider 'Dear Sir or Madam' instead of 'Sir or Madame') and use a consistent closing phrase, such as 'Best regards'.
task achievement
Clarify the details about the delay more clearly, such as explaining how it affected your daily routine related to college.
task achievement
Increase your suggestions' clarity, such as explaining how to implement notifications and changes effectively.
task achievement
You provided a clear description of the problem with the bus service and its impact on your studies, which is essential for task achievement.
suitable writing tone
Your tone is polite and respectful, which is appropriate for a formal letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transport
  • bus service
  • inconvenience
  • schedule change
  • travel time
  • commute
  • reinstatement
  • feedback
  • survey
  • accessibility
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