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The line graph shows the percentage of travels by 4 different transports in one country between 1985 and 2015

The line graph shows the percentage of travels by 4 different transports in one country between 1985 and 2015
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Linking Words
, car
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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usage
Use synonyms
elevanted
Correct your spelling
increased
in
Change preposition
by
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high
Add an article
a high
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 percentage,
while
Linking Words
 Bus was rapidly decreased, and
rail
Use synonyms
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased year by year.
To begin
Linking Words
with
Add a comma
with,
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car
Fix the agreement mistake
cars
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 was equal to 30% in 1985,
Linking Words
however
Add the comma(s)
however,
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 car
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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rapidly increased to 80% between
in
Change preposition
apply
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2000 and 2005,
moreover
Linking Words
 Bus was
usage
Use synonyms
 increased to 50% in 1985,
Linking Words
However
Add the comma(s)
However,
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 Bus
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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rapidly decreased to
the
Correct article usage
a
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 percentage
10
Change preposition
of 10
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% in 2015. And
in addition
Linking Words
,
Rail
Use synonyms
 was
usage
Use synonyms
 and equal to 20% in 1985, and
rail
Use synonyms
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased to 20% between
in
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apply
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2005 and 2010
rail
Use synonyms
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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decreased to 10% in 2010
moreover
Linking Words
 it raised to 20% in 2015,
in
Linking Words
addition
Add the comma(s)
addition,
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 others transports were equal to 10% in 1985 and it declined to 0% between in 1985 and 1995, again others were increased to 10% in 1995,
Linking Words
moreover
Add a comma
moreover,
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 others transports were
usage
Use synonyms
steadinessly
Correct your spelling
steadiness
 to 0% in 2015.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, in addition, moreover".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usage, rail with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 3 times.
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