many people think that mobile phone should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops and public transport. do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the
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fact
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phone
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aware
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daily
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it is a commonly held belief that they must put some struct
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for
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using
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in public
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, there is
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an argument that opposes it. In my opinion,
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consider
I consider
that mobile
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phone
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phones
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should not banned in public
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.
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, the development of our life
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alot
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a lot
of things. It is
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possible to say that
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everything
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around us today
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, the
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to
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it.
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the
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payment
if you
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buy a ticket for
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the bus
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or buy
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something
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frome
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from
a shop you need a apply pay card, because many public
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places
spaces
do not
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allow
to take cass. So it hard to
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it
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, in libraries there are many online books you need your
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to scan a
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code
and take the book. Another point to consider, people spend
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a lot
of time in public
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like shops public transport and libraries.
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how they will overcome the issue, because we
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don't
have other
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ways
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to solve
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this problems
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these problems
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, so
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banneded
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banned
in these crowded
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is not a effective idea.
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rather than but some hard roles
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suggest
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like what Kuwait did,
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Kuwait
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put
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a public
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internet
and
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some
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pastries
parties
for
this
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device
divorce
because
,
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they try to
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follow
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world
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. In conclusion, despite
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people's
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different views, I
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believe
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that we ought to use it rather than block it and add some
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sanity
panty
.

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Improve your spelling and grammar to enhance clarity.
content
Make sure to clearly state your arguments and back them up with relevant examples.
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Your essay addresses the topic and presents a clear opinion.
coherence
You attempt to provide reasons for your viewpoint.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • banned
  • public places
  • libraries
  • shops
  • public transport
  • disruptive
  • disturb
  • safety hazard
  • distraction
  • reduce productivity
  • convenient
  • useful information
  • responsibly
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