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The graph (figure 1) shows the demand for energy and the energy available from fossil fuels in Fredonia from 1985 to 2005 Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the graph.

The graph (figure 1) shows the demand for energy and the energy available from fossil fuels in Fredonia from 1985 to 2005 Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the graph.
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Figure 1 shows a line graph which illustrates the association between
energy
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 demand and
energy
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 available from fossil fuels in Fredonia since 1985. It
also
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 includes predictions for the year 2005. The
energy
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units
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 used in the graph are each equal to 100 billion megajoules.
Moreover
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, between 1985 and 1990, the need for
energy
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 steadily decreased from 5
units
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 to approximately 2
units
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.
Furthermore
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, from 1990 until about 1995, the demand for
energy
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 levelled off and remained constant at about 2
units
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. From
this
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 time onwards, the demand for
energy
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 increased sharply from 2
units
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 in 1996 and is expected to reach 7
units
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 in 2005. In comparison, the amount of
energy
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 available climbed dramatically from 3.5
units
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 in 1985 and peaked at 6.5
units
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 in 1995.
Thereafter
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, it is anticipated to decline rapidly, gradually becoming constant at around 2.5
units
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 from the year 2000. In the 1990s, Fredonia experienced a surplus of
energy
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, likely
due to
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 the availability of renewable
energy
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 sources.
However
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, starting in the late 1990s, a growing
energy
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 shortfall has been predicted. To alleviate
this
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 issue, Fredonia will need to implement
energy
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 conservation strategies or increase reliance on alternative
energy
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 sources in the future.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 65%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "figure" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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