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The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart
provide
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provides
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 key information about
citizens
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how citizens
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 face challenges when they go to live in other
nation
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nations
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 and it
divided
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is divided
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with
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into
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 three groups, 18-35 , 35-54 and over 55
age
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. The units
measured
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are measured
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 in percentage. Starting with
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group
Correct article usage
the group
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 18-35
age
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, most people say that their difficulty came from making new friends and they are 46%
from
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of
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this
Linking Words
group
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. In
addtion
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addition
, the lowest percentage is
learining
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learning
 the local language 29%
from
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of
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individual
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individuals
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 have
this
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 problem.
Moreover
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, The
secound
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second
group
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is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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35-54
age
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have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
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 a different
issue
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 is finding somewhere to live 39%
from
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of
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this
Linking Words
age
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 reported
this
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issue
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 and
its
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it is
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 the highest percentage in
this
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group
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.
Also
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, in
othe
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other
counter
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countries
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 than the first
group
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, the lowest
prob;em
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problem
 they face is making friends 36% of them face
this
Linking Words
 situation.
The
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In the
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last
Linking Words
group
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, people
in
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aged
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age
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 over 55% their biggest problem is learning the local language with 54% of them
reported from
Wrong verb form
reporting
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this
Linking Words
issue
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. In conclusion, each
group
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 have
diiference
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different
 issues
than
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from
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 the other,
overall
Linking Words
age
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 from 18-35 have
problem
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problems
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 with making friends but
the
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in the
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secound groub
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second group
 35-54
age
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 finding where to live is the main
issue
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to
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for
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 them, and the
last
Linking Words
groub
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group
 the
age
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 over 55 most of them have
huge
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a huge
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 challenge in learning the local language.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group, issue with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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