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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. »

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. »
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The table illustrates information about)) consumer spending on different items in five
countries
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((2002)). It compares the percentage of total expenditure in ((Ireland, Italy, Spain,
Sweden
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, and
Turkey
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)) on ((three categories:
food
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/drinks/tobacco, clothing/footwear, and leisure/education)). ((
Overall
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, the most noticeable trend is that)) people in ((
Turkey
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 and Ireland)) spent the most on
food
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, drinks, and tobacco,
while
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 ((
Sweden
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)) had the lowest spending in
this
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 category. ((
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, leisure and education had the lowest percentages across all
countries
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.)) In ((
Turkey
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)), ((32.14%)) of total spending went to
food
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, drinks, and tobacco, followed by ((Ireland)) with ((28.91%)).
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, ((
Sweden
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)) had the lowest figure at ((15.77%)). ((
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,)) spending on clothing and footwear ranged from ((5.40% in
Sweden
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)) to ((9.00% in Italy)). ((
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,)) for leisure and education, the highest spending was in ((
Turkey
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 at 4.35%)),
while
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 ((Spain had the lowest at just 1.98%)). ((Meanwhile,)) most
countries
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 spent less than 4% on
this
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 category. ((
Overall
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, changes were more significant in the
food
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 category than in the others.)) ((The data highlights how consumer priorities varied across
countries
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 in 2002.))

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, overall, while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, sweden, turkey, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • food
  • drinks
  • tobacco
  • clothing
  • footwear
  • household goods
  • services
  • leisure
  • education
  • other products
  • comparison
  • highest
  • lowest
  • followed by
  • in all countries
  • various
  • summarise
  • main features
  • relevant
  • information
  • selecting
  • reporting
  • spending
  • table
  • goods
  • data
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