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The two maps show the difference in layout of village in 1995 and present.

The two maps show the difference in layout of village in 1995 and present.
The two maps show changes
in
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between
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 1995 and
Present
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the Present
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.
Overall
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, it can be intelligibly seen that,
while
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 in the formerly the village was more tree trunks, presently, it has become more lodgings community with flats and apartments. In 1995, the village had few Green shoots,
such
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 as
,
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 fresh air,
with
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beautiful nature parks, and there were living placements, on the south
part
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part,
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 was
sea
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the sea
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, with fishing smack, with the addition of
sport
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a sport
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center
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centre
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. In
present
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the present
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 time,
th
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the
 western half of the village remains unchanged, and has the original accommodation, the Hotel and housing have
also
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 not been changed.
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,
untouched
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the untouched
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 western part of the hotel became Modern and big. The place of fish market was reconstructed to the apartment,
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moreover
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moreover,
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 on the southern west, fish boats were destroyed. In the middle of
area
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the area
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 was
park
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a park
the park
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, today it became
Holiday
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a Holiday
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homes
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home
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, close to built new car park,
in addition
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on
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to
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northern
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the northern
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 east
constructed
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the constructed
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 Golf field
with
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near
Tennis
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the Tennis
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 course.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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