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Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email: recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn explain how your friend could learn this sport suggest that you both learn this sport together

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Dear Viraj, I am writing to you about the new athletics which you asked for.
This
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 new game is available at our Saradar
sports academy
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Sports Academy
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 at an affordable price. The
sport
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 is gully
cricket
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 which is suitable for you as you are a big fan of
cricket
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 you will love
this
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sport
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.
This
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sport
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 has a different rule than the actual
cricket
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 but it's not difficult. As you know actual
cricket
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 has long boundaries and all but
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 of long
boundaries
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boundaries,
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this
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sport
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 has a small area where all players stand nearby and have to play the same as actual
cricket
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. You will definitely love
this
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sport
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. The one rule is so amazing that rule if you hit the ball and the fielder catches the ball after one touchdown to the ground with one hand you are out. So, I recommend you come to my home by tomorrow morning and we will both go to the Saradar sports academy to register for
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sport
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 and learn together. your best friend Parth

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Task Achievement
Improve the introduction to more clearly outline the purpose of your email and make it more engaging. For example, you might start with a friendly greeting and express enthusiasm about helping your friend find a new sport.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider refining the description of the sport to improve clarity. The explanation of gully cricket could be more structured, possibly breaking down the differences from traditional cricket in clearer terms.
Coherence and Cohesion
Add a conclusion to wrap up your email. A simple closing statement expressing excitement about learning together or wishing your friend well can give your email a nice finish.
Content
The email has a warm and friendly tone, which is great for engaging your friend.
Task Achievement
The suggestion of learning together is encouraging and adds a social aspect to the email, making it more appealing.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advice
  • recommend
  • suitable
  • learn
  • coach
  • lessons
  • tutorial videos
  • practice
  • tennis club
  • group
  • schedule
  • regularly
  • participants
  • tournaments
  • friendly matches
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