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The line graph below shows the percentage of people in Africa, subscribing to move by and fixed line phones from 1994 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of people in Africa, subscribing to move by and fixed line phones from 1994 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart compares the number of African people, using mobile
phones
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 and fixed-lineline
phones
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 over a ten-year period from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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, it can be seen that despite the proportion of people using mobile
phones
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 being lower than those using
fixed-line
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phones
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 at the beginning, the popularity of mobile
phones
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 saw a significant increase over the period given and overtook the
fixed-line
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phone
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 user numbers in 2001. To start off, the proportion of
fixed-line
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phone
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 users started from 1.7%, which is more than the mobile
phone
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 user's percentage by 30 times. The rate of mobile
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 and
fixed-line
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phone
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 showed an almost identical trend, rising by 1% until 1999, after that, the figure for mobile
phone
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 users overtook those of
fixed-line
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phones
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 in 2001 at approximately 3%. Skyrocketing from 1% in 1999, the usage of mobile
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 reached about 9% in 2004.
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 the number of people using
fixed-line
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phones
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 witnessed a gradual rise to just over 3%
at the end
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 of the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words phones, fixed-line, phone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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