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The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the measure of renewable energy in the total power supply in four different nations between 1997 and 2010.
Overall
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, Iceland had the highest proportion of reusable power during
this
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 period
while
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Australia
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 and Sweden had the lowest supply.
Moreover
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, it is observed that in 2010, the majority of countries had the largest supply compared to other years.
To begin
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 with, Iceland and Sweden maintained a noticeable upward trend in the amount of renewable energy they got.
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, both countries recorded the highest volume in 2010 with Iceland at 70
while
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 Sweden at almost 10.
On the other hand
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,
Australia
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 and Turkey saw a downward pattern and a fluctuating trend respectively.
Furthermore
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,
Australia
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 experienced a remarkable decline
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 approximately 50% from 1997 to 2010.
Although
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Australia
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 had the greatest supply in 1997 at almost 10, Turkey's highest proportion of renewable energy was in 2000 at 40 before falling to just above 30 in 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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