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Writing Samples
Band 3

The internet is viewed an excellent means of communication by many.However, there are some who would argue that it is actually destroying our communication skills . Discuss both views and give your opinion.

With the advancement in Information and technology
Internet
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 is widely used by
people
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 for daily work which includes communication,surfing, banking,and many more.
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 there are lots of benefits for us some
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 it is bad for
people
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 rather than beneficial. Now let us assume that a
foriegn
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foreign
 student is staying far away from family and he wants to
intract
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interact
 with his family members, so
interent
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internet
 servers as
means
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 of bridge between them.
Other
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 example is
that where
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 a director of
university
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a university
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 wants to convey a message to all staff and students who
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under
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 his institute so
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internet
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the internet
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 is best for him. The
use
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 of email over the
last
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 decade
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 as
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 resource to share information . Other the other hand few
people
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 believe that
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internet
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the internet
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 has
adverse
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an adverse
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affect
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 on society by killing communication skills. Before the invention of
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internet
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the internet
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people
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use
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 their vocal skills
for
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interaction
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 with each other which boost
level
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the level
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 of confidence of
individual
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while
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 interacting face to face.With the
use
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 of
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technology
techonlogy
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techonlogy,
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 AI is widely used to get ideas which
also
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have
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bad
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a bad
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affect
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 on someone's mental power. In conclusion ,
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Internet
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the Internet
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 is a technology of
future
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the future
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 we cannot ignore it but we will
use
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 it in
such
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 a way that it will boost our confidence and increase our communication skills.

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task achievement
Your introduction provides an overview but could be clearer in presenting the two views more distinctly. You might want to explicitly state that you will discuss both perspectives before giving your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the overall organization of your ideas. Each paragraph can benefit from a clearer topic sentence that guides the reader. This enhances logical flow and coherence.
task achievement
Ensure that each example is fully developed and explained. For instance, give a bit more detail on how the use of email has changed communication over the last decade.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and spelling errors such as 'foriegn', 'intract', and 'techonlogy'. This will improve the clarity of your writing.
task achievement
You have provided a balanced view of both perspectives, which is important for this type of essay.
task achievement
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your opinion and the importance of the internet in communication.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • means of communication
  • enhanced communication
  • accessibility
  • diversity
  • global dialogue
  • face-to-face communication
  • social anxiety
  • superficiality
  • nuance
  • emotional connection
  • attention span
  • effective communication
  • verbal communication
  • written communication
  • mindful
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