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The diagram below shows a simple system that turn dirty water into clean water. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The diagram below shows a simple system that turn dirty water into clean water. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
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The diagram given illustrates how unclean
water
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 is transformed into fresh
water
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 that humans can drink. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident that there are six main steps in the whole process used to filter
water
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, beginning with
fulfilling
Verb problem
filling
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water
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 into a
barrel
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 and ending with the
water
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 which can be used. The process commences with filling
water
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 to the plastic
barrel
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 until it is full.
Water
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 is discharged directly to the
barrel
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 before being filtered through a sand layer. After that,
this
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water
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 meets the charcoal coat, which can absorb little dust and make it become more clean. In the fourth stage of the process, the
water
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 approaches the deepest layer, which is called gravel material.
This
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 is the crucial stage, it can help
water
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 more purer and nearly no bacteria. Before drinking
water
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 in a glass, it is moved into the storage drum by a long pipe linked between the filter
barrel
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 and the empty drum.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, barrel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • filtration system
  • gravel layer
  • sand layer
  • charcoal layer
  • impurities
  • boiling process
  • bacteria
  • microorganisms
  • condensation stage
  • purified
  • contaminated water
  • potable water
  • transformation
  • capture
  • remove large impurities
  • remove small impurities
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