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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

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Generally, students are less and less interested in scientific fields, especially at
university
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. There are several reasons why
this
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 happens,
in
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particular
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 related
with
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 the complexity of the subject.
Moreover
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,
this
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 leads
also
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 to several consequences,
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 lack of experts in the
future
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.
Science
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 is becoming less popular among pupils, in relation to its difficulty. Becoming a scientist is a long path, which usually takes more than five
years
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 of study, sacrifices, and money.
Furthemore
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Furthermore
,
future
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 perspectives are not
so
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as
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 encouraging as 10
years
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 ago, in that most of the available careers are already occupied. Today, people prefer finding a flexible job,
instead
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 of dealing with the same sample inside a laboratory.
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,
this
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 trend has only negative effects. If just a minority chooses to study
science
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 at
university
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, there will not be enough experts in the
future
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.
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 could be a problem, especially if we consider that, in the next 30
years
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, we will need more and more people dealing with scientific discoveries, in order to find new treatments for
future
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 diseases or viruses, or,
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, solutions to climate change. Recent research from an American
university
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 has shown that just 1 person to 10 would like to attend a
university
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 course related to
science
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.
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 survey explains, with clear figures, the actual problem, which will continue to increase over the
years
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.
To sum up
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, nowadays
science
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 -
as well as
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 related subjects - is rejected by young students, for its complexity and length. There might be several consequences of
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 choice, in an uncertain
future
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, which will need scientists' knowledge more than ever.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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