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Band 4.5

some people think that governments should invest more in public transportation instead of bulding new roads and highways? To what extent do you agree?

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In many countries,
traffic
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 congestion and pollution have become major problems.
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 some people argue that governments should allocate money to develop
highways
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 to combat these issues,I personally believe that investing in mass
transportaion
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transportation
such
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 as
buses
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 ,
trains
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 and subways is
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a
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sustainable way to mitigate these problems. No doubt , air pollution is increasing at an alarming rate which is mainly caused by increased
traffic
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 jams and carbon
emmision
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emission
emissions
by
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from
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private vehicles.Dependency on personal vehicles is
a
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the
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 main reason behind
this
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 issue, which can be solved by making public transportation more accessible.
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 allocating funds for the development of community
transportations
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transportation
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 might be
expensive
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more expensive
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 than expanding
highways
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, the benefits
such
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 as an increase in air quality and
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a
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decline in
traffic
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congestions
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congestion
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 is worth it.
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 , countries like Japan and
swizerland
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Switzerland
 have invested in public
buses
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 and
trains
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, which have not only decreased
traffic
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 on the
roads
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 but
also
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 improved living quality because of a decline in air pollution.
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 expanding
highways
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 and
roads
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 can improve
traffic
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 flows temporarily ,
this
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 solution
work
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works
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 for
short
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a short
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 time owing to increasing
papulation
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population
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.
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,improving
roads
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 and
highway
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highways
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encourages other people too who may
using
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use
be using
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 public transportation which
cause
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causes
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traffic
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 on the
roads
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 and more carbon
emmision
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emission
emissions
whereas
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 mass
transportaion
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transportation
not only
help
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helps
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 to fight environmental problems but
also
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 make travelling affordable and
covenient
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convenient
 for the average earners.
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, cities like Montreal and Brampton have sustainable and
budget friendly
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budget-friendly
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mean
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means
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 of public
buses
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 and
trains
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 which have encouraged people to use
it
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them
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 often
instead
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 of private vehicles. In conclusion,
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 improving
highways
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 and local
roads
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 can increase
traffic
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 flow temporarily , in the
long-term
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long term
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development
in
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of
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 public
buses
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 and
trains
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 is a sustainable way to solve environmental issues.The governments should prioritize public transportation
instead
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 of expanding road
infrastrucres
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infrastructures
infrastructure
as it is more effective.

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language
Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., 'emmision' should be 'emission', and 'transportation' is misspelled 'transportaion').
task response
Although you have addressed the prompt, aim to provide a clearer stance in your introduction that aligns with your conclusion. Consider rephrasing your thesis statement to indicate the extent of your agreement more explicitly.
coherence and cohesion
Consider enhancing the flow between ideas by using more linking words or phrases (e.g., 'firstly', 'moreover', 'on the other hand'). This would improve the overall logical structure and make it clearer for the reader.
task achievement
You successfully provided relevant examples from Japan, Switzerland, Montreal, and Brampton to support your points about public transportation.
task achievement
Your argument for public transportation being more sustainable is clear and well-articulated, demonstrating good reasoning in your stance against expanding highways.
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