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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowdays
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, Moving abroad needs to
speek
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speak
 like a native.
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, It can be beneficial for your adaptation in social
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. I did not agree. Because it is not easy, Since you will confront so
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strugles
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struggles
.
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,
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if
 you were a basic in local
language
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, It will be lost without any improvement at your new location. Nearly all administration need to be fluent
at
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in
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local
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the local
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language
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.
Moreover
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, It will
have
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 arduous when you want to deal with some services. A prominent example
are
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 international students facing
obstucles
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obstacles
 about paying online their
universities
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 fees.
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 they could not
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 with some facilities like applying for
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a scholarship
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scholarship
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scholarships
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 or
know
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knowing
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 their
schedule
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 studies
,
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 Since
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 university website is not well-acquainted
for
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 them.
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, It can rule out
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many
benificial
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beneficial
 merits. Another dilemma, When they will not make enhancement at their
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 They will not find
job
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a job
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 easily.
Due to
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 their lack
knowledge
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of knowledge
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linguistics
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of linguistics
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.
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, A newcomer has bumped
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 issues when he wants to apply for
job
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a job
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seeking
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. He will not fill his document at many
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 to complete his
admiting
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admitting
editing
 on
website
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the website
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.
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, Even someone has
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 and fill all personal information within
this
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 website. After
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 him to take an interview, He will not be
succedded
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succeeded
. Which
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of
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that is
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 not practical
ether
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either
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 way.
Therfore
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Therefore
, A newcomer must have at least
upper
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intermidiate
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intermediate
 local
language
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for getting
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aclimatising
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acclimatising
acclimatizing
 on his social work. In
conclution
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conclusion
, We must know each country has a
diffirent
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different
 culture, And the key
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 getting through is
language
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. Knowing their culture,
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can
be
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facilitate
to
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them to
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 integrate
in
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there
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their
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 life
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also
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and also
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 become a member of them.

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task achievement
Ensure your introduction clearly states your position towards the statement; use direct phrasing such as 'I disagree with the statement'.
task achievement
Refine your thesis statement for clarity and precision. Try to outline how you will support your argument in the following paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
Improve paragraph organization. Each paragraph should focus on one clear idea or point, with supporting examples and explanations.
coherence and cohesion
Work on linking ideas more effectively. Use cohesive devices like 'Moreover,' 'Furthermore,' or 'In addition' to connect your thoughts and improve flow.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammatical accuracy, particularly verb forms and subject-verb agreement. This will help improve the clarity of your writing.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion frame the essay well, addressing the key topic.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples regarding the challenges faced by non-native speakers, which support your main points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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