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The map shows A and B village in 1995 and now.

The map shows A and B village in 1995 and now.
The two maps show the difference in
layout
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the layout
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 of
village
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the village
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 in 1995 and nowadays.
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,
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while
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apply
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in the past the village has become more urban and less rural. The most striking development throughout the period in terms of accommodation. In 1995, the town was less developed with a public
park
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, farmland in the northeast, and fewer buildings. There were two hotels near the
park
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, a small coffee shop, and a fish market close to the sea. Some houses and a
sport
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sports
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 facility were located in the northwest. Morning fish boats could be seen in the sea, and there was no mention of any luxury facilities. At present, the public
park
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 and farmland have been replaced by a golf course and tennis course. The number of hotels has increased, and holiday homes have been added nearby. A car
park
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also
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 been built beside the coffee shop. The fish market and boats have disappeared, and now yachts are seen in the sea. More housing and restaurants have been constructed, and apartments have replaced the sports area

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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