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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The two graphs show a
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 result related to
research
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students
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 in Australia, in 2001 and 2010. The table exhibits the
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 of researchers among
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different categories - local
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, and international
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. The pie charts study,
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, the
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 of
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males
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 and
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females
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 in the sample.
Overall
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, the
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 of
research
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students
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 grew dramatically from 2001 to 2010,
in particular
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 the
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 of international
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. Generally,
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 and
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 are equally distributed over the sample. The
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 of
research
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students
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 in Australian universities increased sharply, from 38,849 in 2001 to 54,081 in 2010.
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, the most important figure is related to international
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, which has changed from 5,192 to 14,593 in 2010, roughly three times
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2001's proportion. These figures are clear
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 from the pie charts. The percentage of local researchers was 87% in 2001, against 13% of international. Just nine years later, local decreased to 73%,
while
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 international
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students
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 grew
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to 27%. The percentages of
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males
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 and
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females
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 have remained almost unchanged from 2001 to 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words research, students, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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