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Some people think the main purpose of education is to make individuals useful to society; others say education helps them to achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and fiver your opinion.

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society
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 and to be useful to
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 helps them to achieve their dreams. In the upcoming
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 both views and give my opinion. Some bodies
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main
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the main
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 point of
education
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 is to make individuals useful to
society
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studies
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the medicial
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medicial
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medical
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medical
 or electric field which helps
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society
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diferent
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different
 ways. Doctors help the nation by providing them
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medicial
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medical
 experience which they gain
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 doing
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 That educational experience helps people to get cure in a
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less time.
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, other people think that
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helps
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achive
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achieve
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in
 the future. When
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someone
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 is in school everyone has
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their
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 aim in life some children
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 to be
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 or some
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want
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 to be a
doctor
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doctors
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in
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 there early age.
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 ambition can only be done by doing
studies
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 why when they
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in
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twenty
 five they only get a job if they have a good
education
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 in
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the
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 same field. In my
opinon
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opinion
,
education
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 is most important
rather
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whether
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its
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society
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its
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for personal use.
Main
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thingh
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thing
things
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education
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education
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the education
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 rate is up
then
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unemployment
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the unemployment
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 rate will go down in the same
pase
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place
. If
any one
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anyone
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there
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their
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 dream in
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their
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 eyes without
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been
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have
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happend
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happened
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You present a clear discussion of both views, which is essential for this type of essay.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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