The chart below gives information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below gives information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The figure shows
the
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information
of
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different places that are used for
dance
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while
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the bar charts inform the
amount
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of participants by age group, categorized by style of
dances
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dance
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.
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, the private-owned studio is one of the most popular locations, followed by school and community halls,
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the college-based studio is the least preferred place amongst others.
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of the
dance
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classes
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are attended by younger participants,
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the modern ones are filled by
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adult
students
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. The
dance
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classes
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mostly happened in a private studio, which contributed to almost
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half of the total
dance
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classes
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by
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48%,
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other
classes
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happened in a hall
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owned by
school
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and collective places, by 24% & 18% respectively. The least preferred one,
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college-based studios only accounted for 10% of the contribution. Ballet and tap
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are
more
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preferable for youngsters under 11, where it recorded the total number of above 1000
students
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combined,
while
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older
students
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only accounted for around 700
students
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in those
classes
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. Senior
students
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aged 11 - 16 years old
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are shown to have more interest in modern
dance
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class
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classes
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which have 200 more older
students
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compared to the young ones.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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