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The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compatisons where relevant.
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Both maps
shows
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show
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 information about the transformation of an area between 1995 and
present
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the present
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.
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,it is readily apparent that
,
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it is a place where the village was converted into a
recretional
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recreational
 one by changing buildings with another new version.The modifications among previous and later are
decribed
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described
 below. On the one hand,the most significant adjustment in a new variation of
map
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the map
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 is the
amount
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number
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 of houses
were
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that were
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 expanded.
In addition
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, farmland
replaced
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was replaced
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 with
golf
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a golf
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 facility and
furthermore
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forest
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a forest
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 park was demolished and
constructed
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two tennis courts.
Moreover
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,one of
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the eyecatching
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eyecatching
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eye-catching
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 replacements is the alternation of
shop
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a shop
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 and fish market with
restaurant
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a restaurant
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 and apartment.
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,next to the hotel was erected
car
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a car
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 park in the east of
map
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the map
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,
additionally
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spring
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springing
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 up
new
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a new
the new
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 fishing port on the sea.It is clearly seen that
,
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apply
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the locations of
hotel
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the hotel
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 and cafe remained unchanged on both maps.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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