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The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050.

The graph below shows the population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicts population growth until 2050.
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The given line graph
give
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 information about the number of
people
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 in two different countries
India
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 and
China
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 from 2000 to 2050.
Overall
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, the amount of
people
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 in
two
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the two
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 countries
are
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has
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 increased for 50 years.
However
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, the figure of
India
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 in the past was lower than
than
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that
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 figure of
China
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, but in the future,
India
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 will be higher. For the first 20 years, there was
a
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apply
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significant growth for
two
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the two
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 nations in the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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.
However
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, the increase
of
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in
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 population in
China
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 was higher than that figure of
India
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that
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apply
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increase
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 from 1 to 1.3. billion for
India
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 and from 1.25 to 1.4 for
China
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 from 2000 to 2020. For the next 30 years, there will be a similar amount of
people
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for
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in
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India
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 and
China
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 in 2030.
India
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 will peak at 1.6 billion in 2050, but there will be a decrease for
China
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 from 1.45 to 1.4 billion.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, india, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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