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The charts below show the percentage of students on an adult education centre taking various courses offered in 1985 and this year.

The charts below show the percentage of students on an adult education centre taking various courses offered in 1985 and this year.
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The chart shows the percentage of students
on
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in
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 an adult education centre taking various courses offered in 1985 and
this
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 year.
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, we see there
is
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are
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section
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sections
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 of various courses has
been
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were
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 offered in 1985, in
pie
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the pie
a pie
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 chart of our current time we see that there is one
section
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has gone
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thats
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that
 is music appreciation. If we compare the two
type
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types
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 of
both
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charts we see some increase
of
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in
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 some of
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the section
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section
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sections
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while
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other
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others
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decreasd
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decreased
decrease
 or
remain
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remained
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 stable.
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example
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 we see that
fitness
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in fitness
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 and dance the
percantge
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percentage
 of taking the
coure
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course
core
 remained the same , art and the modern
languge
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language
shows
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show
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high
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a high
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 increase . There's another
section
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has
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that has
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 been gone over
year
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a year
the year
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 which is local history. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 there is some
changine
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change
of
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in
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 the courses which
the
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apply
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student
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students
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has been
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have
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 applied betweeen int the past in our time, and the
indicate
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of
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that
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pepole
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people
 changed the things they want to learn over the years.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words section with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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