The first line graph shows the average world oil price for each year from 1970 to 2005.The secong chart shows the top six oil exporting countries and how much they export each day.

The first line graph shows the average world oil price for each year from 1970 to 2005.The secong chart shows the top six oil exporting countries and how much they export each day.
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The line graph illustrates annual world
oil
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prices between 1970 and 2005,
while
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the bar chart
decribes
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describes
the amount of
oil
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exporting
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exported
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by each top seven countries.
It is clear that
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the world price of
oil
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had the maximum value in 1990.
Moreover
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, Saudi Arabia exported the largest
million
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of
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apply
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barrels per day. First of all, looking at the line graph in more detail, the average world
oil
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price fluctuated over 35 years. The price started at
the
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its
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lowest point (14) in 1970,
while
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it reached its peak at almost 90 in 1981.
After
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this
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year,
oil
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prices decreased to 15 in 1999 but
raised
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rose
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again by 58 in 2005.
Furthermore
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, in the bar chart, we can clearly
seen
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see
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that Saudi Arabia was the major
oil
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exporter, which exported 9
million
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of
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apply
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barrels every day. The following country was Russia, with 6.5
million
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.
Finally
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, the others, Norway, Iran, United Arab Emirates, and Nigeria, contained
the
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a
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similar level, with roughly 3
million
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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