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Band 3.5

In many countries the cost of living is rising. What are the effects on individuals and society? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

There is no denying the fact that citizens face huge
issue
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issues
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 with the
rising
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rise
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 in the
cost
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 of living.
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 essay will discuss what can be done to prevent
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 problem and how
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 issue could
effects
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affect
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on
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apply
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people
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 and society.
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 with, there are many effects
would
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that would
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produce
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be produced
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 from
inflation
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.
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, the
low wages
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low-wage
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 citizens will get the most damage from
inflation
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. To illustrate,
the
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apply
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low income
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low-income
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people
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 won't get high promotions to deal with
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cost
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 rising
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 they
doesn't
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increases
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increase
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 their wages.
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,
inflation
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 will decrease individuals
consumeing
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consumption
 and their investments.
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, when one employee
have
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10,000
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a 10,000
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 monthly income he would invest 30% of his wage but if prices
increses
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increases
increase
 he will decline his inesting percentage and
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 will
effect
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affect
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 the
country
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country's
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 economy when
less
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fewer
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people
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 attend to invest in new projects. In terms
on
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of
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 what measures can prevent
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 problem,
rise
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raise
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 the
ineterst
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interest
 rate to
decline
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decrease
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 the
inflation
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 rate.
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,
inflation
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came
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comes
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 from huge spending and lending when we increase the lending
cost
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 for banks that will lead to
decrease
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a decrease
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the
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in the
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 demand for
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 money.
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,
fisical
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fiscal
polices
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policies
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 would
also
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 help to decrease
inflaton
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inflation
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 and
this
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 will lead to
stop
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stopping
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cost
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costs
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 from rising.
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, when
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
increase
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increases
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 taxes that will make
people
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 less
atractive
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attractive
for
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to
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 spending. In conclusion,
their
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is
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are
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 many things that would
causes
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cause
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cost
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 to rise, it is
also
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 true that
goverments
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governments
government
polices
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policies
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 would be great acting to prevent
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 issue from
spreeding
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spreading
.

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Task Achievement
The introduction mentions the negative impact of rising living costs but could explicitly state both effects and solutions that will be discussed in the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Rephrase phrases for clarity, such as 'many effects would produce from inflation' to 'many effects can arise from inflation'.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that verb forms and tenses agree. For instance, 'effects on people and society' instead of 'effects on people and society'.
Task Achievement
Make sure to clearly define terms like 'inflation' and 'fiscal policies' for better understanding.
Task Achievement
The essay identifies the main issues related to rising costs and proposes practical solutions related to interest rates and fiscal policies.
Task Achievement
There is a clear attempt to illustrate points with examples, such as the impact of income on investing habits and the effects of taxes on spending.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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