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The graph below shows that the percentage of australian export to 4 countries from 1999 to 2012.

The graph below shows that the percentage of australian export to 4 countries from 1999 to 2012.
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The line chart illustrates the percentage of Australian
exports
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 sent to
Japan
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, the United States,
China
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, and
India
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 between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
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,
while
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exports
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 to
China
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 and
India
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 increased markedly, shipments to
Japan
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 and the United States experienced steady declines. By the end of the
period
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,
China
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 had become Australia’s top export destination, followed by
Japan
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, the US, and
India
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. In 1990,
Japan
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 received the largest share of Australian
exports
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, accounting for over 26%.
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,
this
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 figure dropped sharply to approximately 20% by 1995, followed by a more gradual decline, reaching just under 17% in 2012.
In contrast
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,
China
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 started the
period
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 with a modest 3%
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 but saw a dramatic and sustained rise — especially after 2000 — to become the largest export destination at 28% by the end of the
period
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.
Exports
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 to the United States fluctuated around the 10% mark until 2000, after which there was a decline, with the figure stabilizing at around 6% by 2012. Meanwhile,
India
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 remained a minor export partner for much of the
period
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, maintaining just 1% until around 2000.
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, it
then
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 experienced a significant increase, peaking at 7% in 2010, temporarily surpassing the US, before falling slightly below it by 2012.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exports, japan, china, india, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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