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Crime rates are likely to decline due to the advancements in technology, which will help prevent and solve crimes in an easier way. Do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays modern and advanced
technology
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help
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helps
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 in preventing and finding criminals in a quick manner ,
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 ,the
crime
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 rate is likely to decrease in the future. In my opinion , I agree with
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statment
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statement
 and
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 essay will explain my
reassons
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reasons
. Investment in
researches
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research
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 to improve
technology
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 in
police
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the police
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 field has a huge impact
in
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 solving and preventing
crime
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.
On
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 other words, advanced
technology
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had
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has
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 multiple advantages when it
had
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 used in a
lawenforcment
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enforcement
 fields , because it is simple, fast , has
a
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large data
of
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 the population , possible and easy way to connect
the
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informations
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information
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 all over the world to solve
a
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crime
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. A good example to
illlustrate
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illustrate
 the benefit of
technology
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 is DNA
test
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tests
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, before the late 80s it was very difficult to find
murders
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murderers
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 or
kidnapers
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kidnappers
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after
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 test multiple cases were solved and multiple people
saved
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 from the risk of being in danger of
crime
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. Recent modern
technology
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 is crucial in preventing
crime
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that
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leads
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 to
decline
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a decline
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the
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 number of law rule breakers.
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strong
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a strong
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 camera system that can
measures
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measure
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 the
drive
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driving
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 speed of car drivers
at
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 the roads , and
then
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to
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them money
penality
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penalty
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 on their phones with the car serial number.
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 , multiple
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awareness
campaighns
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campaigns
 through different social media accounts help in reducing the rate of
crime
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 , talk about different measures to protect
your self
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yourself
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 from criminals and how to help the police by giving
informations
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information
pieces of information
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 about the
law breakers
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lawbreakers
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. For
this
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technology
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 saved multiple
people
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 lives in different
situation
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situations
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 and
make
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made
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 it easy to solve any case. In conclusion ,
technology
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 is vital
on lawenforcment
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in law enforcement
 aspects that impact the
safty
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safety
 of the
countris’
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country’
 population.
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,
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the
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cime
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crime
time
 statistics are more likely to decline in the future
due to
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 prevention and educational
programm
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programs
 through social media that focus on police and
citizens
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citizen
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 rule in
crime
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 prevention.

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the clarity and organization within paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea and supporting details that connect logically.
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Revise for grammatical accuracy and spelling, particularly with terms and phrases that may affect comprehension.
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Ensure that each argument is expanded upon thoroughly with clear explanations or examples to strengthen your points.
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The essay presents a clear opinion on the topic and attempts to explain the impact of technology on crime rates.
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Use of specific examples, such as DNA testing and speed camera systems, demonstrates an effort to support the main argument.
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