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You recently spent a night in a hotel and had to put up with a great deal of noise very early in the morning because of a faulty central heating system. The manager promised to contact you regarding compensation but you still haven't heard from him. Write a letter to the hotel. In the letter • describe the problem at the hotel • explain what the manager had said at the time •say what you want the manager to do.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in connection with my annoyance about your hotel in which I am staying. I booked that room on
24th
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the 24th
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 of
march
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March
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 for the sunset and sunrise view near the beach. I have been a regular visitor
of
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 your community. I would like to draw your attention
on
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to
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 one of the problems that I faced
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 night. There was a lot of noise in the room, which is next to my room. They used high volume to listen to the music. Even though I told them, I have a meeting tomorrow
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morning so I have to get
early
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up early
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. I requested them to slow down the volume,
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but it
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 disturbed me,
they
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and they
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 ignored me.
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, I called the manager of the hotel,
he
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and he
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 said he
will
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would
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 talk to them,
no
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but no
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 one arrived there. I would like to have a full refund of my booking. It would be really appreciated if you
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 take the appropriate actions for future reservations. I looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Manjinder Kaur

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific details about the situation, such as the exact time of the noise and how long it lasted, to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph covers a single main idea. For example, the second paragraph mixes details about your previous visits with the current issue, which could lead to confusion.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to review your letter for minor grammatical errors, such as changing 'I looking forward' to 'I am looking forward'.
task achievement
Your tone is polite and appropriate for a complaint letter, which is commendable.
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