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Some people belive that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no denying the fact that each person
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 to achieve his dreams and goals.
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 it
commonly
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 held
belif
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belief
 that some people
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 that he should accept whatever he had and move on regardless,it is not his ambition. There is
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 an argument that some people believe the opposite, he should work and improve
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himself
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 to get what he
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.
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 essay will analyse
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion.
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 hand on, It
definitely
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is definitely
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 hard to accept
a
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the
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 worst situation
whatever
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whether
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 it
was
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is
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 a
job
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or
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apply
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a college , major even a
marrige
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marriage
. The hardest thing is the feeling
of
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 place is not yours.Being or living in the opposite life that you dreamed of
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 a great disappointment.
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,
some
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in some
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sitiuations
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situations
 I agree that you should accept it and try to live with it but
others
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in others
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 no.
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 as a beloved friend
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 you
with
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 no reason you should not get
stucked
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stuck
 in it getting depressed crying every night staying at home and living in the past.
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, an unwanted
job
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 if you need
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job
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 you should go for it regardless,
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of it
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it
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 disadvantages.
One
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other
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the other
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 hand,
self improvement
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self-improvement
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 is important.
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,getting a
high offer
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high-offer
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job
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 that requires
a
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good
english
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English
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 language but he
do
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does
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 not
has
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have
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this
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 requirement.He should not stop and accept that he will not get the
job
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insted
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instead
 of learning
english
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.
To sum
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up
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 not every difficult issue should be accepted, but some issues should be accepted. In conclusion,there are no easy answers to
this
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 question. On, balance,
however
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, I tend to believe that it depends on the situation.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to introduce your ideas in a more structured manner. Starting with a clear thesis statement in the introduction can help guide the reader better.
coherence and cohesion
Try to clearly distinguish between both views in separate paragraphs. This will enhance the logical flow of your essay.
task achievement
Ensure that all points made are elaborated with clear explanations and examples. This will help to articulate your ideas more comprehensively.
coherence and cohesion
Proofread your work for spelling and grammatical errors to improve clarity. For instance, 'belif' should be 'belief' and 'sitiuations' should be 'situations'.
task achievement
You expressed a clear opinion on the topic, which is important for task achievement.
task achievement
Your choice to include real-world examples, such as needing to learn English for a job, makes your argument relatable and strong.
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