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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of sunshine hours per year in three major city Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of sunshine hours per year in three major city Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data gives information about the mean monthly temperatures and quantity of sunlight
hours
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 annually in three major cities which are
London
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,New
York
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 and
Sydney
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.The y-axis represents the temperature and the x-axis indicates the various months of the
year
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 from January to December.
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, the weather conditions in all three cities
London
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,New
York
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 and
Sydney
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 fluctuated during the given period of time. Regarding the total
hours
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 of
sunshine
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, New
York
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 had the highest,
Sydney
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 came in 2nd place
while
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London
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 ranked the lowest. Using the Chart,
Sydney
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 maintained a steady temperature of twenty-five in the first six months of the
year
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,in July the temperature was fifteen before returning to twenty-five
at the end
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 of the
year
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.
London
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 and New
York
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 followed a similar pattern. At the beginning of the
year
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,
London
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 and New
York
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 had temperatures of five and ten respectively and gradually increased to just a little under twenty and thirty respectively before going back to five and ten by the end of the
year
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. With regards to the table,New
York
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 had the highest amount of
sunshine
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 with two thousand, five -hundred and thirty-five
hours
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, followed by
Sydney
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 which had two thousand, four hundred and seventy-three
hours
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 of
sunshine
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.
London
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 only has a little amount of
sunshine
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 at one thousand ,one hundred and eighty
hours
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, london, york, sydney, year, sunshine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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