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(2024) You have an extra room in your apartment and would like to rent it out to a student. Write a letter to the university council officer. In your letter: describe your apartment and the facilities available mention why you want to rent out the room say what kind of tenant you would

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing regarding my
offering
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 of a spare
room
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 which I can rent to a student. The apartment is situated near the university. It can take around 15 minutes
walk
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 or 7 minutes
bike
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to bike
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 ride.
Although
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 it is an old building, there are several facilities which can attract lots of students. It has an indoor swimming pool and a gym studio gym beside the pool. The apartment has three rooms and the
room
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 which is available for
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the student
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student
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students
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 to rent is
on
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apply
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probably
the
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in the
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 beautiful garden. As it is situated on
10th
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the 10th
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 floor the
nightview
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night view
 is splendid from that height. One of my friends recently
move
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 to Canada. So his
room
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 would be empty for
next
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the next
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 2 years. I feel it would be quite easy to maintain and clean the
room
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 if it
will be
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were
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 rented. I would appreciate
a
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 company of a tenant who is peaceful and has good knowledge of cooking different
type
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types
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 of cuisine. I hope you will take my application into consideration and find an individual who's suitable. Yours sincerely, Jojo

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task achievement
Consider providing more details about the neighborhood and nearby facilities, such as shops or cafes. This would make your letter more appealing and comprehensive for potential tenants.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your points more clearly; for example, you could separate the description of the room and its view into different sentences to enhance clarity.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a polite tone and is appropriately addressed, which is essential for formal correspondence.
complete response
You clearly state your intention to rent the room and provide a brief description of the available facilities, which is good for task response.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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