Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behavior? Provide examples for your opinion.

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In today´s globalized world , there has been
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increasing trend
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people
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moving out to other
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we will discuss
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the possible reasons for
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outcomes
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.
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a wider perspective ,
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from
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countries
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are found to be moving to developed
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in search of jobs , better education and lifestyle . Many youths seek to move out from their nation for higher education and tend to settle
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from Asian
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like India , Nepal , China etc are found to settle in Europe or America to improve their living
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. I am a living example
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moved out from Nepal with my parents and now currently living in Norway as I have better opportunities here .
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major source of income is through remittance i.e. by
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living abroad .
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people
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to explore more and gather more experiences . Though relocation has been normalized
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it has some drawbacks . For me personally , I think it
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apart from our cultural roots .
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many
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like
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, Portugal , USA
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been affected badly by migration .
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overpopulation
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overpopulation,
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the citizen of the country themselves are losing their employment opportunities . Crime rates are increasing gradually which has directly created hatred
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some specific nationality .
The nation
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like Nepal ,
India
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and India
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are losing talented youths which is creating
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for their development . Many
people
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are mentally depressed
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homesickness , some are trapped as they cannot go back to their country . Relocation comes with both merits and demerits .
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how we handle it . In my opinion , every person
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their own idea of living . Some might want to live in their own country or some might want to have a fresh start somewhere. I would
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draw my conclusion by saying "
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is a freedom of choice
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every individual" .

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coherence and cohesion
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Clarify your main points, and consider expanding them further with more detailed examples or explanations to enhance comprehension.
coherence and cohesion
Strengthen your introduction and conclusion with clearer, more impactful statements to define your essay's purpose and summarize your findings.
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You provided personal experience, which can make your essay more engaging and relatable.
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You addressed both the advantages and disadvantages of relocation, showing an understanding of the complexity of the topic.

Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Remote work
  • Political instability
  • Living conditions
  • Advancements in technology
  • Connectivity
  • Quality of life
  • Cultural curiosity
  • Job opportunities
  • Immigration policies
  • Barriers to entry
  • Prosperous nations
  • Emotional cost
  • Healthcare
  • Living standards
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