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The tablshows the production of milk in 4 different countries in 1990 2000 2010

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The table illustrates annual
milk
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production
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 in four distinct nations in three different
years
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 (1990, 2000 and 2010). The
production
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 of
milk
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 was comparatively highest in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 in all the given
years
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. In 1990, 11,262,000
litres
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 of
milk
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was
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were
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 produced which rose to 11,466,000
litre
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litres
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 in 2010.
Similarly
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, the dairy
production
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 in Australia was 11,246,000
litres
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 which was
second
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the second
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 highest
in
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 the beginning of the year.
However
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, the amount was in decreasing trend in the later
years
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 and surprisingly, it was the only
country
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 whose
production
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was
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decreased. In regards to Tanzania and Guatemala, both of these countries showed substantial
increase
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increases
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 in the quantity of
production
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. Guatemala was the least
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milk producing
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milk-producing
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country
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 in 1990 with only 26,000
litres
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 but
this
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 was increased by almost 3 folds in 2010 marking 84,000
litres
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.
Likewise
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, in
Tanzania
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Tanzania,
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 87,000
litres
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 of
milk
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 was produced yearly in 1990, but it almost doubled up
in
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at
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 the end of the period.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 was the highest
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milk producing
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milk-producing
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country
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whereas
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 Guatemala stood
last
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 in the same. Australia was the only
country
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 whose
milk
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production
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 was decreased over the
years
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.

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task achievement
The introduction should clearly mention what the data is about. You could include what the numbers represent (e.g., in litres) so that the context is clear.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each country’s production figures are well-explained with appropriate linkage between points. For example, when discussing Vietnam, linking its trajectory to the overall trends would improve coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Provide a summary of the trends observed in the data. This would enhance the conclusion and help consolidate the findings you’d mentioned earlier in the essay.
task achievement
The clear identification of trends for each country is commendable, especially regarding the increase in Madagascar and Guatemala's production after initially low figures.
coherence and cohesion
Use of comparative language (e.g., 'comparatively highest') to describe data enhances the clarity and depth of analysis.

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