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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main futures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main futures, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart reveals how many percentages of the
population
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 living in the cities in four Asian
counties
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countries
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 from 1970 to 2010, with expected
population
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 in 2020 and 2040. It can be clearly seen that the
people
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number of people
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 who
lives
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live
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 in the cities
population
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be
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significant
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significantly
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 increase in the future of 2040. Malaysia and Indonesia had similar
population
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 growth patterns. Both saw a
slightly
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 rise, respectively from 30 to 70 and around 12 to over 40
percent
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 from 1970 to 2020. After that, both countries will continue increasing for the next 20 years. In sharp contrast,
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the Philippines
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Philippines
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Philippine's
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 percentage climbed dramatically to reach about 47
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1990 and dropped to 40
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2010.
Then
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this
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 country slightly rose in 2020. Thailand did not have a big change
of
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in
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 the
population
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. It started from just under 20
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1970 and slowly went up to 30
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2020. Both two countries are projected to increase in
population
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in
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from
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 2030 to 2040.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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