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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph shows the
percentage
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 of Australia's exports to 4 countries , the key information of
this
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 graph is presented in percentages.
Overall
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, China has shown a steady incline in exports from Australia,
USA
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the USA
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 shows ups and
down
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downs
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 in their
percentage
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 and
finally
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 declines
at the end
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 of the
period
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 , japan
also
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 shows a slight decline in their
percentage
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. India
also
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 declines by the end of the
period
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.
According to
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 what is shown , some of the countries that show dropped in their
percentage
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 are
the
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apply
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us and India,
however
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, it doesn't cross 10 per cent of receiving exports from Australia, which shows remains at their
percentage
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 after the mentioned
period
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 , between 1990 to 2012.
On the other hand
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, China has shown a massive increase in their
percentage
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 of almost 25 per cent, and China is the dominant in
this
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 graph, japan dropped by nearly 10 per cent by the end of the
period
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • percentages
  • exports
  • trend
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • fluctuations
  • stable
  • economic ties
  • demand
  • decline
  • recovery
  • policy changes
  • trade relationship
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • temporary surge
  • specific events
  • incentives
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