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The charts below show the average age men and women retired in seven countries in 2004 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average age men and women retired in seven countries in 2004 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two
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 below
describes
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 the normal
age
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 of both
men
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 and
women
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 stop working in the
year
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years
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 2004 and 2008 in seven different countries: Denmark,
France
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, Germany, Italy, Netherlands, Sweden and the UK.
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,from 2004 to 2008, both the average
age
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 of
men
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 and
women
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 tended to increase, except
men
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 and
women
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 in Italy were stable and decreased. The highest
age
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 of
men
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 and
women
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 giving up work was in Sweden in both two years.
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 with, the highest average
age
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 of people who retired in 2004 and 2008 was around 63. The Netherlands and the UK had
the
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different
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age
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ages
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 of retirement but that was
minimally
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, it approximated the
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age
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ages
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 of 62 and 63. In 2004,
men
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 and
women
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 in
France
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 and Italy retired earliest,
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, there was a slight change
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France
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 and Italy was static at 59,60 years old.
On the other hand
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, there were three countries that had the retirement
age
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 of
women
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: Netherlands, Sweden and the UK,
that
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 was the group of 61
age
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 and above. The data shows that there was only Italy which had the retirement
age
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 of
women
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 fall to 59. All countries except
France
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 were markedly increased, especially
France
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rised
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raised
rose
 slight.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, men, women, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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