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The bar chart below shows the percentage of share of total world production by Asia, Europe and other parts of the world from the years 1840 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of share of total world production by Asia, Europe and other parts of the world from the years 1840 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar graph gives information about the percentage of total
world
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 output of
Asia
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,
Europe
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 and other parts of the
world
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 from the years 1840 to 2000. Generally, in the period from 1840 to 2000, the rest of the
world
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 was the region with the most stable increase and decrease in total output in the three regions
while
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Europe
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 had a downward trend and
Asia
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 was unstable and fluctuating.
To begin
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 with, three areas were unstable from 1840 to 1920.
Asia
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 started
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 at the highest
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percent
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52 in 1840
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 significantly went down to 20% in 1920.
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,
Europe
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 slowly rose from 40
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 to 46
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in 1920.
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, the rest of the
world
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 started at the lowest, at only 9% and tripled to 31% in 1920. In the next period 1960-2000, the total production in
Asia
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 grew from the lowest 20
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 to 39
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while
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Europe
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 collapsed
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 28% in 2000. The rest of the
world
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 had not much change, slightly declined
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 36% to 33%
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 of the stage.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, asia, europe, percent with synonyms.
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