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The bar chart below shows the percentage of share of total world production by Asia, Europe and other parts of the world from the years 1840 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of share of total world production by Asia, Europe and other parts of the world from the years 1840 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the changing percentage
share
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 of total
world
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 production held by
Asia
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,
Europe
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 and the
rest
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 of the
world
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 across six distinct points, spanning from 1840 to 2000.
Overall
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,
Asia
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 experienced a significant decline in its
share
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 of
world
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 production from 1840 to 2000.
Europe
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’s contribution peaked in the early 20th century and
then
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 decreased steadily. Meanwhile, the
rest
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 of the
world
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 saw a consistent increase in its
share
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 over the same period. In 1840,
Asia
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 held the highest
share
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 at around 51%, followed by
Europe
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 at 40%,
while
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 the
rest
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 of the
world
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 contributed only 9%. By 1880,
Europe
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 had overtaken with a
share
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 of about 45%,
while
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Asia
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's
share
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 dropped sharply to 25%. The
rest
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 of the
world
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also
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 saw growth, reaching approximately 30%.
Europe
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 maintained its lead in 1920, reaching its highest point at around 47%. Meanwhile,
Asia
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’s contribution fell
further
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 to just 20%, and the
rest
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 of the
world
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 increased its
share
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 to 33%. From 1960 onwards,
Europe
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’s
share
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 started to decline, falling to about 36%, and
then
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 to 28% by 2000, becoming the smallest.
On the contrary
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,
Asia
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's
share
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 began to recover slightly, climbing to 27% in 1960 and
then
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 to 39% by 2000.
Likewise
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, the
rest
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 of the
world
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also
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 continued to grow,

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words share, world, asia, europe, rest with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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