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The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over six months in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over six months in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph below contains information about the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over six months in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The number of adult
visitors
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 fluctuated
through
Change preposition
throughout
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all
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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of
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apply
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the period,
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however
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however,
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this
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 figure was constantly the highest position. The
amount
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number
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 of
visitors
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 aged under 15 witnessed a moderate downward
while
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 the figure for special exhibition
visitors
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 saw a minimal upward. The Adult
visitors
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 data tend to remain from 1997 to 2002 but
then
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 increased sharply in 2007 from 300000 to 400000,
however
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 all of the period is cut down . The phase of both
visitors
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 aged under 15 and Special Exhibition
visitors
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 . The
Visitor
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Visitors
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 aged under 15 each year reduced more than 500 tales of tourists . Special Exhibition
visitors
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 increase a very small amount and
that is
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 the smallest number of all three headings.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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