Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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some
people
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the most
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time of
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life
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is the teenage
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,
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, other people have an idea that
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years
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are the
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happiest. In
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essay
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I will discuss
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opinion
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opinions
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also
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give my view as well.
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that
,
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in the teenage
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there
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less stress because they have
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responsibilities. Everything from money to food is provided by their parents. They do not have to worry about going to
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and paying the bills.
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, they can enjoy
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life
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without having
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of job loss.
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, they do not have to maintain
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a work-life
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life
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balance,
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that
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is the most difficult thing in today's
life
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. On the other side, those who think that adult
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is
more happy
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happier
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because they are free of
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stress about
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studies. They do not
have to
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always
take
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have
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permission
for going
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to their favourite places. They can go wherever they want to be. In my opinion, the
most
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happiest
life
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of the
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years
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year
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depend
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on our satisfaction. If we are happy
from
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on
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inside
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the inside
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it does not matter
that
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whether
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we are
tennager
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teenager
teenagers
or
adult
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adults
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.
Both
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phases of
life
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comes
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with different obstacles. So, I think that we should enjoy
both
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phases in our own way. In conclusion, I want to add that it is true that
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teenage
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life
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and adult
life
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both
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has
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responsibilities.
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, it
is
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totally
depend
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depends
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upon the individual how are they going spend their
life
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along taking happiness with them.

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coherence and cohesion
Clearly present arguments for each viewpoint in separate paragraphs and ensure more detailed explanations of points.
task achievement
Use a wider range of vocabulary and grammatical structures to enhance the complexity and clarity of your ideas.
task achievement
The essay addresses both views and includes a personal opinion, which is important in a discussion essay.
coherence and cohesion
The structure is logical, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adolescence
  • fulfillment
  • responsibilities
  • exploration
  • long-term goals
  • sense of stability
  • carefree
  • contentment
  • well-being
  • life stage
  • unique opportunities
  • deep satisfaction
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